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The Unwanted Dove

My transformation could not be stopped
A weakened heart is to blame

Remnants of tears are left
I will never be the same again

So tired of everything / These memories of suffering
This is my dark reincarnation / Oh thou have forsaken


I am not your messenger anymore
I'm blind from keeping faith

I no longer recognize a savior
There's no more numbing the pain away
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Lock me up
Destroy the key

I'm not strong enough
To ever be free

So please clip my wings tonight / Never again will I take flight
Allow me to be useless / I yearn to be powerless


It won't be wrong
To take another shot at me

I am done
So cage away this false symbol of peace
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My metamorphosis conquered my will
A fate I cannot defy

I don't know if I feel any guilt
For my light's demise

It's not what I deserve / It crushed my dreams
This is what I get in return / From really trying to believe


In the wake of these shadows
I am left haunted

I am the corruption called sorrow
I have become the unwanted
I step into a realm of grief
I fall away from grace

I cast aside peace
I hone my pain
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A revised poem from my remix project-
"Living My Life / Behind Hollowed Eyes"
(The Darkness Never Dies)

In volume eight: The False Idols
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Critique by Demoness19 Dec 19, 2012, 6:14:27 PM
I have to say this is a very in depth poem. It captures the reader to keep reading on, to really get to the end. It shows how light can go to darkness, how unwanted darkness truly is. It truly makes the reader think of what this poem means, try to figure out the meaning for themselves. To me it is how easy hope and light, faith and love can be turned to darkness. Obsession and pain, and just tears of sorrow. The rhyme scheme threw me off a little bit. Sometimes it would rhyme sometimes not, but all in all a very deep and well written poem. Very good job, keep up the amazing work. :)
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Wow the photo of the dove was on your side. First of all, this speaks from outside and in.... I gleaned a vision of a person who is dark, who may also look ominous. The fact that the speaker asks for the wings to be clipped shows the personal loathing we can feel when we realize our nature is not what it should be. You have even given a hint to the environment of darkness. The use of free verse is an even better display of deviance. Metamorphosis, corruption, transformation, are all words which invoke the same horror of those around us when they see what we have become. (Your formatting reads like we are listening to the struggle of man vs. self) Your vocabulary for this piece is excellent, and I have to wonder where your inspiration comes from...Keep your dark secret deep poet!
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emzee4life Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Student Digital Artist
So dark and deep I love it ♥
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I'm happy that you were able to connect to this one. :D
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xxAkatsukiGirl85xx Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
no problem ^^
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xxAkatsukiGirl85xx Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
beautiful ^^
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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roadkillKitten Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
This is a very moving piece. The imagery flows throughout and paints a clear picture for the reader. Very nicely done!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for your kind words, it means a lot right now. :)
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roadkillKitten Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
My pleasure. I always try to comment on a piece that touches me in some way. Keep up the good work!
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HelghastPredator Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Oh, I like this very much and the image is very well done!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I'm so glad you liked this! ^_^
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kagari231 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
I dunno bout you guys but that would be EXCELLENT as an ingraving on a Pocketwatch lid or inside it as the face inside the pocketwatch
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D I agree!
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kagari231 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012
with the hands (the pointy things that shows the time) and the numbers (roman) being white so people can actually see the time.
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gInabr0wn Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student Filmographer
dark n evil, love itty!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I'm so happy that you liked it! ^_^
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twotoesx3 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
this bird is never unwanted. it cleans up the mess.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
<3

You're right. :)
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iKestrel Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist
Woooooooooooohoooooooo... this is super sad... I like it!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. ^_^
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Mephiles-Dark-Reaper Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Awesome poem and lovely picture
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
I'm relieved that you enjoyed all I had to offer with this deviation. :D
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Mephiles-Dark-Reaper Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Np :D Yeah it was very amazing ^^
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PaperAnomaly Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I feel like this has been my life as of late.

Thank you for sharing such a deep piece with all of us :heart:
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome, BUT thank YOU!
I'm glad you found this piece to your liking, it means a lot. :)
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PaperAnomaly Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you for replying, for it means a lot to me ^^
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SolarLugia Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Sad yet very intruging!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I'm very glad you enjoyed this. :)
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StarTrekPikachu Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
it looks like my black pigeon named Peter! thank you for making my day :D
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Maybe ..... it is Peter.....!!!!!!!!

O_O
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StarTrekPikachu Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
where did you take the picture?
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I took....at peter's house!
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StarTrekPikachu Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
lol :D
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EzzieLynn Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student General Artist
I love you, man! The emotion and the great depth you bring into this is just ... it's mind-blowing! :iconloveloveplz:
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol awww :P
Well I'm so happy that you liked this. :D
Thank you!
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EzzieLynn Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Student General Artist
No prob! Keep writing! :D
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Lust0fADeeperPain Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
:iconwhiteroseplz: So sad the title but I love it
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
I'm so glad you liked it, it means a lot. <3
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Lust0fADeeperPain Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
It's some fine writing and it is my pleasure :rose:
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Tux-Prowess Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student Digital Artist
No, rip thy black feathers from your skin and condemn thee words to hell where they once been!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This earned the comment of the day!

^_^
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Brightsatan Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
kinda depressing if you ask me
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Obvious comment is obvious :'(
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
Sadly beautiful poem.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
Very welcome! :)
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