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July 23, 2013
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The Maze

Divide reality from illusion
Forwards is backwards
Separate belief from redemption
Success is failure

Where shadow crosses light
The ground meets my face
I'm surrounded by lies
The truth is too far away
Hope is this-

Faith is this-

Pain is this-

It's just another dead end / It's filled with emptiness
This is death's discontent / Resenting life's rhetorical existence

Fear is this-

Chaos is this-

Peace is this-
An infinite cycle mocks
Turn after turn
The timelessness cannot stop
As the same path is reborn

An unstable prisoner drowns
Lost inside my own encrypted mind
The way out can never be found
In this maze called “my life
Relive the days
Recreate the nights
Of my shame
In my mind
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Overall it's pretty good. I found the way you changed fonts a bit disorienting, but yet so is a maze. I personally think that you should have changed the third "stanza" (by this I man the bolded section, not the individual revelations) into the same kind of stanza as the rest. I really liked the extended metaphor, but I think the ending fell a bit short. You kind of threw off the veil with the "my life" part at the end, which is why a gave you a relatively low originality score. The ending was rather cliche in my tastes, nothing I haven't seen before, though I quite liked the rest of it. The revelations were extremely insightful into how you view the world. Overall, a pretty good poem.
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SyGuy2013 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I have not yet read this, but I am faving it so that I can clean out my envelope as it is in the thousands. I will read this when I can. If I like it, I will keep it faved, and let you know.
SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hope you like it when you do get around to reading it. :P
erco71 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you amaze me everytime I read something from you..i like this very much:)

SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your kind words. Comments like these boost my inspiration like no other! <3
erco71 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know the feeling hun:hug:
and it was my pleasure:)
MissyVapes Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
This one left me in an utter state of confusion...
SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Mission accomplished!
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rastamex Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
no problem :)
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