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Shade Of Blue

From a deep slumber...
I have awoken
To this cruel color...
That leaves me haunted

My eyes scream
As I opened the door to my soul
Those thoughts of you start to bleed
Reminding me that you're just a person I used to know

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A dark ocean blue that I once knew
Leaked through my window
It matched this mood
Amplifying the sorrow

Sparking negative energy
It's the secret source of my core
The only element allowing me-
To survive another day, once more

Without a care
I can endure
Without a prayer
I push forward

So let this hue shower
With extreme hatred
Force the nostalgia to devour
And let my heart remain powerless

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Wishing I was never left behind
I'm not baffled that you still bother me to this day
The reminders of you are such a beautiful sight
I'm sure the desires for you will never fade

The last of our memories aren't kind
It's haunting waking up without you...
I'm surrounded in my empty life
By this lovely shade of blue...
When I'm feeling down and blue
All I have to think of is you
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"Living My Life / Behind Hollowed Eyes"
(The Darkness Never Dies) Remix Edition
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OOOOOOH, morbid indeed. Thoughts haunt us, and the deeper the feelings attached to the person involved, the worse they (the thoughts) seem to linger. This has an excellent imaging strategy, just like a movie, it begins with a big zoomed-out shot "I awaken". Then it gets close "door to my soul", then far away to the environment (leaked through my window), then back to the thoughts, and the bleeding. OOOOOH! Also, to bring up the beauty of the haunting ex-lover in the penultimate stanza, shows an inner struggle of man vs. self. I guess Man vs. Self and Man vs. Power greater are some of the better themes which evoke mixed emotions. You have done a great job of that here. You have a quality such as Edgar Allen Poe of choosing words which remind of unpleasant feelings. By injecting words like, "lovely, and beautiful", you cause a tension within your work that leaves the reader teetering. Good one!
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purpleblue14 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
i like it , very well said.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I'm happy that you liked it. :D
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thedoughNUTer Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist
Said well
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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TheWSK Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Very sad. :( Well written!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awwww *hugs*
Thank you so much for your kind words. <3
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Redbuick95 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
love it
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
^_^
Thank you so much.
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BeAnIndividual Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is such well written. There is a lot of good imagery in this and it is really easy to connect to and it relates to a lot of things others feel as well. Personally, I can really feel this poem. Especially the last 8 lines, so beautiful. Great job on this poem. Truly wonderful.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
I'm so glad you were able to connect to it in such a way. It means a lot. Thanks again!
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Astro-Creep166 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
A manly tear was shed for this peace

Great job
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awww lets have a manly hug :'(

Thanks, I'm glad you liked this one.
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MichaelThomasBlack Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
I really like this. You have a gift of communicating very strong emotions with words.
Beyond that it also seemed like a mini-narrative was unwinding as well. The way the text is broken into three parts I think has a lot to do with this.
Very cool.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for such reassuring words. It made my day when I saw this comment.
It is kind of a different piece than my other ones. It's like almost a first person view, if that's the best way to describe it. I don't know, it just seems different to me somehow.

I usually break my poems up now, so a vast majority of them have a beginning, middle, and end. Only a few exceptions for just having two parts.

Thank you again.
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MichaelThomasBlack Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
Yeah, for sure. It was definitely a unique piece.
Still great though
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