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Rain Of Fate

The proud flags were torn away
When warfare came

Burning buildings collapsed
Just like the nations which used to stand

We're no longer united
Because we're consumed by fighting


Quarreling over desires / selfishness is earned
Money sets lives on fire / morals are governed

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Humanity conquered this gift of nature
Because we were given this curse of failure
Just our simple touch turns beauty into torture
And we won't stop, until we get more and more

The sins of our fathers
The prayers of our mothers
The tears of our sisters
The blood of our brothers

A man-made cycle of life and death
Believing in religion; and abiding by justice
Living a life of crime, and an unmatched wickedness
Made-up answers to made-up questions is all we will get

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The last living tree burned
Pity among Mother Earth mourned

The dark clouds shed tear drops of forgotten affection
While we only care about our selves, when the planet needs compassion

The dire cries for help needs to be heard
We cannot let the suffering all around us remain ignored


Because fate rains down upon us all / let it pour
And soon human-kind will fall / make it storm
Let it rain
Let it storm
Make it rain
Make it storm
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This poem is rewritten for my final project which is titled-
"Revelation Days And Resolution Nights"
First part of "The Rain Chronicles" Saga.
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Rema-Alkhany Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
Although the text is sad and pessimistic, but frankly this is the  life, but our hope in God's great.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.....I think... :P
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philippv745 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is very emotional. Good job!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, I'm so happy you enjoyed this one. It's very close to me. :D
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aylee95 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012
awesome~! :D Loved it loved it loved it.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^.^ Thanks, I'm so happy it was received well. That's all I wanted.
<3
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aylee95 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012
Well, it was well written and well recieved. :) You're welcome
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shine4evr Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
So deep and true. :heart:
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I've been getting that "true" comment a lot....it's starting to get stuck in my head lol.
But thank you so much, I'm very glad you liked this piece. <3
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shine4evr Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Sorry because of my horrible un-original comment making brain. :D Your very welcome!
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FallenGreyShadow15 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very powerful writing :)
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^_^
Thank you so much, comments like these keep me writing! :D
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FallenGreyShadow15 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay! :D
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SilverShadowRunner Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is Beautiful! Like other people said, I like the imagery.

"Made-up answers to made-up questions is all we get."
I just love that line.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I was hoping that'd be someones favorite, it hit me right when I wrote that line.....wow...that's...pretty good! XD

Thank you so much.
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OfRealmNine Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I set fire... To the rain...
I love this. It's full of emotion and... Ah, I'm speechless.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, I've grown to love that song, because everyone has been listening to it around here x.x

And thanks a ton, your comment means a lot! <3
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OfRealmNine Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
xDD

Aww, you're welcome!
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ravivegeta Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Student Photographer
awesome...
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you liked it. :D
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coogi100 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
cuz i set fire to the rain
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
But there's a side to you
That I never knew, never knew.
All the things you'd say
They were never true, never true,
And the games you play
You would always win, always win.
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coogi100 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
But I set fire to the rain,
Watched it pour as I touched your face,
Well, it burned while I cried
'Cause I heard it screaming out your name, your name!

When I lay with you
I could stay there
Close my eyes
Feel you here forever
You and me together
Nothing is better

'Cause there's a side to you
That I never knew, never knew,
All the things you'd say,
They were never true, never true,
And the games you play
You would always win, always win.


But I set fire to the rain,
Watched it pour as I touched your face,
Well, it burned while I cried
'Cause I heard it screaming out your name, your name!

I set fire to the rain
And I threw us into the flames
Where it felt something die
'Cause I knew that that was the last time, the last time!

Sometimes I wake up by the door,
That heart you caught must be waiting for you
Even now when we're already over
I can't help myself from looking for you.


I set fire to the rain,
Watched it pour as I touched your face,
Well, it burned while I cried
'Cause I heard it screaming out your name, your name

I set fire to the rain,
And I threw us into the flames
Where it felt something die
'Cause I knew that that was the last time, the last time, ohhhh!

Oh noooo
Let it burn, oh
Let it burn
Let it burn

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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012
REAL AND TRUE. Amazing work!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the kind compliment. <3 It means a lot.
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deviruu Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012   General Artist
Beautiful imagery! And the words you used really flow together! c: Great job!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much.
I feel this version of the poem has reached its top potential this time around, and I'm happy for that.

<3
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deviruu Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012   General Artist
No problem, I'm glad you're so passionate about your work :huggle:
A lot of people don't seem to be nowadays.
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starlingthefairy Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Student General Artist
This is beautifully written. The imagery of the whole piece is lovely.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I tried to make it all fit and make sense, so I'm glad to hear that.
Thanks a ton. :D
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starlingthefairy Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome!
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beautifulmother Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012
ONE WORD WOW!!!!! THIS IS AMAZING GREAT WORK :)
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ That makes me so happy, thank you so much for your energetic comment. <3
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beautifulmother Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012
YOUR WELCOME :) I WISH I WROTE HALF AS WELL AS YOU DO
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musiclovingmisfit Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012
this is fantastic. i love the imagery. <3 :)
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm relieved that you've enjoyed this piece, as it means a lot.
Thank you so much. <3
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musiclovingmisfit Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012
you're welcome :) <3 and meaningful pieces often translate well, and resonate with other people. yours has done a great job at that.
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Christianonfire7 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is such a powerful piece. Very well written!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I added a new concept to this revisioned version. So in a way, it is powerful :) I'm glad I managed to get the message across clearly.
Thank you! :D
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MebutREAlizeD Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
<3
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
<3 <3
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MebutREAlizeD Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you win :D
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