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Nightmare: The Tragic Lover

In the silence
I can hear the lyrics
Of my mind's awareness

You're hidden from the world
Only to be known by me

My fate is foretold
You're the end that I wait to see

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The remnants of rust consume
The taint covering my heart seeps through
I am dying from a cancer that was caused by you

All it took was a wound
From the kiss that would seal it soon
I just wish that I could take you down too

From something so blissful / Bore a mask of deceit
I remain so resentful / I don't know what to believe

A being that could damage / A feeling that could heal
You pushed me over the edge / You made me wish it was real


I find myself pathetic
That you were just an anesthetic
I used you until you fulfilled your purpose

Now I don't know who the real monster is
What have we really become of this?
One whose heartless and the other is painless

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These dark mirrors
Are the protective barriers
Of the true lies of one another

You were my angelic desire
A hope that I held dearly

You were a demon that could devour
A love that ended tragically
All fantasies end in tragedy
Yours must have been meant for me
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I personally love this piece, I am not the poem lover type but the mystery and how it manages to tie itself together in the end amazes me. I love the use of reference to how the lover is a numbing source from something that I would have liked to be described such as maybe an event or time that was particularly depressing. Perhaps more insight to the reason the lover was important. The way this poem was put together and was directed so that you were given a very brief description then went into detail and finally concluded into an ending is something I appreciate. Overall the entire poem was done exceptionally well.
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AjD3vil Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I :heart: it so much! :heartbreaker:
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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erco71 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:+favlove:
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Vampire-Hinata-112 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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Vampire-Hinata-112 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No.problem.
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frei76 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
I really :heart: it! well done! :pat:
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much ^_^ It means a lot when someone says something as kind as that. <3 thank you.
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frei76 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
:aww: no problem, you're welcome! have a nice day! :hug:
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Moon-Shatte Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
the nightmare poem reminds me very much of my nightmares, I feel your to pain, because I feel it self every day
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