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Nightmare: The Only Cure

My insides burn-

Like swallowing acid

Reality slows down-

Smiling is therapeutic

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Health is a virtue / Strength is torture
Alive again tomorrow / Enduring the horror


It's excruciating
To keep on breathing

Every reflection
Mirrors are left sickened

Grinning back at myself
You must be enjoying this hell

Perfect possession / Muffled suffocation
Heart is racing / Sight is darkening


In these hallucinations
My skin is melting

Oh how I wish I was dreaming
Of when I finally start recovering

It's only hopeful thinking
A cure for me is a delusion

Quarantined tears / Reality's nightmare
I am beyond repair / All were well aware

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A bright light shone-

Like a welcoming presence

My suffering is done-

Take away my sickness
The only cure for life is death
The only cure for suffering is rest
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This poem is written for my project, titled-
"Broken Wings Unbound: I'm Falling Down / I'm Soaring Now"
In volume nine: Harsh Hallucinations

Nightmare: The Compulsive LiarNightmare: The Compulsive Liar

Step by step
You attempt to walk away from yourself
Breath after breath
You try your best to not call out for help

I am so far from you, I am are better off this way

One tear after another
You were never good at hiding your feelings
All of those cuts seem to go deeper and deeper
You were always the one who took in all of our suffering

I don't know you anymore, I no longer recognize that face

Day by day
You endure this storm of scars
Night after night
You silently cry alone in the dark

I don't know what you're talking about, I'm fine, I'm okay

One dream after another
You see all of the things you


This completes volume nine.
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Critique by shadowsmokeandfire Dec 8, 2012, 5:25:08 PM
This was a very macabre poem, but I have a feeling it was supposed to be. I really liked it, and it had a, interesting theme to it. The only comment I have is that the couple lines that are bold with slash marks between the verses can be a little distracting, because it makes people, well, at least me, wonder why these lines are different from the others. I understand if they were a thematic thing or you wanted to emphasize those lines more because they are more important. I'm just saying I was confused by them when I first saw them. Overall, an amazing poem, and I honestly wish I could write like you.
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FeroniaAutumn Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I haven't come across your writing style before. I'm not sure yet what I think of it, but it sure is interesting! Also, the content is indeed very dark, but most writing is and I think the feeling you want to channel comes across perfectly. Well done!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you find my odd style intriguing. I work efficiently on making it uniquely creative. It has changed through out the years though. I'm sure it will keep evolving and changing as I go along.
Like I said to one of the other deviants that commented on this- I really wasn't trying to make it this dark, but it kind of just wrote itself in a weird way. I only hoped it was executed decently.

Thank you for your kind words. And hope you like my future work.
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FeroniaAutumn Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome and I look forward to your future work! ;)
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WhiteCroe Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
That made me think of the book I'm reading, Esacpe From Furnace...so true for the words as well.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That book sounds interesting to me now. I'm going to google it after this! :P How far are you into it?
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WhiteCroe Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Almost half way through, there are five books in the series (escape from furnace) I'm reading the second one now, it's the disturbing kind of book.
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zgians Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012
This looks amazing
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
I'm glad you liked it. :D
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NnyorNieorKnee Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Really amazing.
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I'm really happy that you enjoyed this one. :D
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EuphoriaMia Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Nice, I felt it...
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it that much. It means a lot. :D
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XxxfirewolfxxX Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
cool pic
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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MrJuniorer Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This Picture Is So Amazing!!!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, well thank you. It took a while to get the color right. I'm so glad you liked it.
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MrJuniorer Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem, I love it!!!!
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sweet-poison89 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
Amazing! the picture matches perfectly with the work. Love it absolutely!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad to hear you say that. I'm now much more proud to have released this deviation. Thank you so much. It means a lot. :D
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Red-alert1 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student Digital Artist
The Flesh of Fallen Angels
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
GET OUTTA MUH HEAD AND STOP WHISPERING THAT! :'(

<3 max payne
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Homeart2000 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student Writer
Whoa... This has so much emotion... I like it!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy that you enjoyed it. I worked for sometime on this, so I'm relieved. Thank you so much. :D
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Homeart2000 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome. It is very enjoyable.
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hanohana Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
I am scared
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:(
I'd let you borrow my blanket to hide under, but I'm currently hiding under it!
:O
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hanohana Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
lol :D
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