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I'm Falling Down
Tears just seemed to pass me by
Swift as tsunami waves touching the sky
Reality was nothing but a mirror
Melting away like frozen water on fading fire
I let out a destructive sigh
Triggering the nightmares I kept inside
The memories that I don't want to remember
I deceived myself whenever I tried to keep it together
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Seethe/Seethe/Seethe
Images of agony
Infected my mind
And stinging anxiety
Shoots up my spine
Breathe/Breathe/Breathe
Despair wrapped around my heart
And it wouldn't let me go
Peace was just too far
I can't take this anymore
Please/Please/Please
I redefined self-hatred
I somehow cornered myself
I always existed in darkness
I was my own martyr who fell
Free/Free/Free
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I had to rip all the paths away
I have to force myself astray
So abandonment won't know where I am
The questions of being alone will become transparent
Condemning one another was just too much for me
All against one and one against all is the moral of society
So I'm taking this leap of faith
With a genuine smile paving the way
Tears just seemed to pass me by
Swift as tsunami waves touching the sky
Reality was nothing but a mirror
Melting away like frozen water on fading fire
I let out a destructive sigh
Triggering the nightmares I kept inside
The memories that I don't want to remember
I deceived myself whenever I tried to keep it together
-
Seethe/Seethe/Seethe
Images of agony
Infected my mind
And stinging anxiety
Shoots up my spine
Breathe/Breathe/Breathe
Despair wrapped around my heart
And it wouldn't let me go
Peace was just too far
I can't take this anymore
Please/Please/Please
I redefined self-hatred
I somehow cornered myself
I always existed in darkness
I was my own martyr who fell
Free/Free/Free
-
I had to rip all the paths away
I have to force myself astray
So abandonment won't know where I am
The questions of being alone will become transparent
Condemning one another was just too much for me
All against one and one against all is the moral of society
So I'm taking this leap of faith
With a genuine smile paving the way
Literature
Oceanfall
Oceanfall
One final leap into the depths below is all it really takes
Open my lungs up, and let freezing freedom take my breath away
I did my time here on Earth, I served my time in life
So now I'm done, it's over, I no longer need to be alive
I've seen what cannot be unseen, I've done what I cannot undo
I cannot change the past, and the future is what I cannot live through
Splash
DOWN
Down
down
A watery grave is what I have dreamed of, it's all I have ever really wanted
A slow, and silent decent, it's an honor to finally become one of the departed
My eyes unknowingly darken, as I instantly try to grasp onto the last of the light
Literature
Aura: The Radiance
Aura: The Radiance
I wore this pain like a crown / I was so broken
I kept on falling down / I felt my soul shattering
I couldn't hear anything / listening to my own twisted thoughts
I was blinded from everything / witnessing my own tragic downfall
I stopped dreaming of better days / I ceased believing long ago
My countless nightmares wouldn't fade / I was left in this dark world alone
I guess this is how I really pictured my own end
I just want it to finally be over with, I won't resent death
To the end of this long, and lonely road
Dangling on my unfinished rope
Lift me up, lift me up, lift me up, and don't let me go!
Hold me hig
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Aura: The Revolution
Aura:The Revolution
I will never live up to any other expectations
I will only just reach the place in life that's destined
Never again will I be a victim of impossible outcomes
Never again will I allow my self-respect to be disgraced and overcome
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I am a prisoner no more
Discrimination became the martyr
I had to put an end to this war
I will not be walked on like I had been before
The future of a fearless life is what I now strive for
The source of my resolve has been built into my core
I believe what's right / To live my life
I'll reach for the light / And shine so bright
There's no limit to the sky / This smile never felt so fine
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I've done all I can
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This poem is the first page for my project -
"Broken Wings Unbound: I'm Falling Down, I'm Soaring Now"
In volume one: Exiled Existence
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactUnusual format and a wonderful rhyme scheme are only two of the things that define I'm Falling Down by HollowedSky.
Brilliantly evocative with the sensory imagery (which included metaphors and similes open to interpretation), the poem moves from steady stanzas to broken sentences by use of enjambment. The deviant's use of repetition and then the break in the rhyme scheme at the very end serve to keep the reader attracted to reading the poem to the very end.
Maybe it's about despairing after heartbreak. Maybe it's to rally one's emotions after devastating events. Or maybe it's just a poem jotted down as a doodle and then typed onto dA. I don't know, and I think only the deviant can answer this themselves.
Read it. Visualize it. See what you think.