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Fallen Into Darkness

I'm a dark void, my shadow casts its own shadow
And I'm too much of a coward to even try and turn back
I'm so bleak, because I've managed to create a new breed of sorrow
And I'd be a fool to even attempt to move out and into the blinding black

My mere gaze can darken the brightest tomorrow
That must be why I am destined to remain here forever
My life is unaware that death is what I yearn to give into
That's another reason to sever every bond for the better

I vowed to myself that I wouldn't take you down with me
Your kind strength and light is what I can no longer borrow
I am nothing but a doubled-edged sword, it is what I will always be
I'm regretfully swaying away from the promised path that I used to follow

But I assure you that I will be alright
So please remember you did everything you could
But I've already made up my mind
And you said every hopeful word you should

Now you need to let me go, and continue on with your burdenless life
You really didn't want to give up on me, but I always knew you would
Now you will no longer worry, because from now on everything will be fine
You tried your very best to help me, but your hope is what I have never understood

You need forget about me as best as you can
Because this battle is lost
It's that time now where your hand can no longer be lent
Because I am a dying cause

Good bye, my dear friend
I'm so sorry to see us go, but sometimes life can be heartless
Hello, the bitter end
Alas, I have finally fallen into darkness
You let go of me, but I don't resent you
Because you did everything you had to
This poem was written for my project which is titled-
"Broken Wings Unbound: I'm Falling Down, I'm Soaring Now"
In volume two: Dark Depths
Fallen Into Darkness-
A Spark In The Dark -
Becoming The Darkness -
Our Walk In The Dark - Not Yet Written
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I'm not really good at writing critiques it is!

All I can say! Because this poem that you wrote was very deep and it felt like it just touched your soul and the fact that everyone in some point of their lives they might feel this way, like they're lost in the darkness or somehow fallen into the darkness and they try their best to look for the light such as hope and faith and the picture pretty much sums it up of what losing hope looks like this poem is very powerful and you perfectly grasp the feeling of sinking into the darkness
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WatchingHoper Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Why can't I hold all of these feels. ;-;
SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer't touch yourself at night..... O_O
tomytieneblas74 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Damn, this is so....Deep !
It's like it epitomizes what a sad, depressed, sorrowful person is really feeling on the inside, and can only find solace in pitch darkness.
SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If you only read the bold parts, it also makes a miniature poem, too. I'm thrilled that you liked this one too. The darkness poems that I release, tend to attract a crowd.
tomytieneblas74 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, I have seen the bold faced letters in the passage do, in fact, make a small poem, sir.
Have you ever thought about merging all these darkness poems you got into a book and get it published? You said so yourself, that it brings in alot of attention. :)
SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah I thought about it a while ago. I may do something like that in the far away future.
tomytieneblas74 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Go for it ! It looks like you got potential! ! :)
NightisZero Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
! .. oh yes ...
SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
iTwistedCookie Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Student Filmographer
<3 <3 Love it ^___^
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