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A Spark In The Dark

After I had met you-
I found out that hope can be so wounding
And now I know what meaningful desires can do-
The pieces of my dreams are still crumbling

You made me fade in-and-out of your Heaven
Allowing me the taste of peace momentarily
And then right back to testing my withdrawing patience
While I plunge back into my same old Hell called: vulnerability

This feeling...is too raw
A tug of war between different kinds of torment
I'm missing you...so much
The rift between us seems to be infinite

Wait...wait...wait
Don't go...don't leave
Stay...stay...stay
Don't let go...of me

...Please...
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But when you left me for the last time-
I knew that the wrong kind of love can be so fucking addicting
I realized that you combined my truth with your lie-
You always made your words so fucking convincing

You forced me to despise what I will never have-
As you pretended to hand me memories of serenity
You just had to make me think that you were within my grasp-
Leaving me to fall into a deep instability

This...was all just a...trick
Of an intense hope
You...egotistical...piece of shit
Portraying love like a sick joke

Spark...spark...spark
Don't ever shine in vain
Dark...dark...dark
Never let me see pain

...Again...
Shadow Shadow Shadow
Smother the pieces of my heart
Hollow Hollow Hollow
Become a part of the dark
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This poem was written for my project which is titled-
"Broken Wings Unbound: I'm Falling Down, I'm Soaring Now"
In volume two: Dark Depths
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I think that you have had stronger pieces then this one. It is wonderful and brilliantly executed, but after reading some of your other amazing poems... it cannot compete. You need to add a little punch. Besides that trivial punch, I'd say this poem does hit home. It pulls at memories that anyone who has ever been in a relationship can feel.

The visual of the heart in the begining, putting that picture there, is a very good idea and a wonderul way to start your readers off. It starts with love, and ends with pain: marvelous.

You have a way with words.
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Its very powerful and true, love hurts and when someone smashes your heart it isnt easy to get back up again. But you put it into words pretty well! I get the fact that you were once hurt by love and it isnt easy to get back up. A very good vision of what it is like to be left in the rain so called. He/she gave you a taste of love then when you were at your weakest ripped it away from you. Alot of raw emotion went into this piece, I can tell. Very good and inspiring, Keep up the good work!
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COLOREDINLOVE Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Spoken from a true sense of who and where you were during this time..we get to see you on so many levels and you leave yourself open and honest for the world to either love it or choose not to embrace your emotions...if you have been in love don't give up hope..you are too young to be alone!!
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frei76 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012
you are able to express what I feel, but I didn't know how to explain! this poem is wonderful :huggle:
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I seem to get that same feedack every now and then, and I just hope it might've helped in the slightest bit.
I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
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frei76 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
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Lola6299 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012
..........this explained my whole situation right now. oh my god..
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:(
I hope everything will look up for you soon.
*hugs*
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DarkForceWolf Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So heart wrenching and VERY good!
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SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I'm glad you enjoyed something like this, I know its dark x.x
Thank you so much. :)
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DarkForceWolf Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Dark insnt totally bad, it might be a bad time in life but it can inspire GREAT art
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AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Student Writer
I love this. It is amazing.
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