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September 17, 2012
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A Spark In The Dark

After I had met you
I found out that hope can be so wounding
Now I know what love can do
As the pieces of my heart are still falling

You made me fade in-and-out of heaven
Allowing me the taste of peace momentarily
And you're right back to testing my withdrawing patience
While I plunge back into the same old hell with this vulnerability

The feeling is too raw
A tug of war between different kinds of torment
I'm missing you so much
A never ending stalemate, the sorrow is infinite

Stay   Stay   Stay
Don't go, don't leave
Pray   Pray   Pray
Don't let go of me



But you left me for the last time
I realized that love can be so addicting
When you heartlessly took back your light
And now the memories of us are slowly darkening

You're forcing me to despise what I will never again have
As you knowingly handed me those memories of serenity
But you just had to go and leave my hopeful grasp
So now I fall away, descending into instability

This was just a temporary gain and a sudden, tragic loss
Of an intense feeling of your consuming hope
It's hypocritical to just label it as true love
Because now I choose to be alone

Spark   Spark   Spark
Don't ever shine in vain
Dark   Dark   Dark
Never let me see pain

Shadow Shadow Shadow
Smother the pieces of my heart
Hollow Hollow Hollow
I'm a part of the dark
Other Poetry: :iconchainoflies: :iconfeardomized: :iconhollowedsky:
This poem was written for my project which is titled-
"Broken Wings Unbound: I'm Falling Down, I'm Soaring Now"
In volume two: Dark Depths
Stock image from :iconxerstock:
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I think that you have had stronger pieces then this one. It is wonderful and brilliantly executed, but after reading some of your other amazing poems... it cannot compete. You need to add a little punch. Besides that trivial punch, I'd say this poem does hit home. It pulls at memories that anyone who has ever been in a relationship can feel.

The visual of the heart in the begining, putting that picture there, is a very good idea and a wonderul way to start your readers off. It starts with love, and ends with pain: marvelous.

You have a way with words.
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Its very powerful and true, love hurts and when someone smashes your heart it isnt easy to get back up again. But you put it into words pretty well! I get the fact that you were once hurt by love and it isnt easy to get back up. A very good vision of what it is like to be left in the rain so called. He/she gave you a taste of love then when you were at your weakest ripped it away from you. Alot of raw emotion went into this piece, I can tell. Very good and inspiring, Keep up the good work!
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COLOREDINLOVE Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Spoken from a true sense of who and where you were during this time..we get to see you on so many levels and you leave yourself open and honest for the world to either love it or choose not to embrace your emotions...if you have been in love don't give up are too young to be alone!!
you are able to express what I feel, but I didn't know how to explain! this poem is wonderful :huggle:
SurvivingNights Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I seem to get that same feedack every now and then, and I just hope it might've helped in the slightest bit.
I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
..........this explained my whole situation right now. oh my god..
SurvivingNights Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I hope everything will look up for you soon.
DarkForceWolf Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So heart wrenching and VERY good!
SurvivingNights Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I'm glad you enjoyed something like this, I know its dark x.x
Thank you so much. :)
DarkForceWolf Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Dark insnt totally bad, it might be a bad time in life but it can inspire GREAT art
AngelofLight03 Sep 17, 2012  Student Writer
I love this. It is amazing.
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