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A Sleepless Night
(That Will Never Alight)

This same old nightmare that I grimly fear
An image of my life haunted by your shadows

I'm frozen in place, waiting for daylight to soon appear
But I don't know if I'm ready to take on another loveless tomorrow

Why am I the one who suffers when you're not even really here?
I should not have to be the one inflicted by your falsely bestowed sorrow

You made and broke every one of those promises
You left even though you knew that you'd be greatly missed

You were not the one saying that you're so sorry
You were not the one who was left crying uncontrollably

You didn't feel your heart being ripped away
You never considered the other side of the pain

For you I completely broke down
For you I remain in countless pieces now

But I vow to never go through that again
Because I will never give my heart to someone in vain

I want you to know that this is the cost
For I am the outcome of when you throw away your love

This cage named my heart won't let me escape
It feels like this will always be a part of my life

I will never move on because your memories are on the way
And I can't seem to be able to ever close these traumatized eyes

I don't know how many more insomniatic moments I can take
It seems like I'm reliving a sleepless night that will never alight

"I stayed awake tonight already knowing that I've had better nights."
And every night
I look for mirrors to fight
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This is beautiful, it is very touching and it can be understood by everyone. The words you use don't confuse me or make me pause, it has a rhythm and it flows very well. The only part that tripped me up was this line "But how long do I have to wait to see a darkless tomorrow?" A darkless tomorrow sounds awkward and made me have to think about it for a second. It would work better if you reworded that. Overall it was very touching and it made me feel something. "This cage named my heart won't let me escape" is my favorite line, it touches me and I can relate, as can most people. Good Job. 8.5/10
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AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Student Writer
This is beautifully written.
SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, this poem is a really personal one.
AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome.
librian637 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
very touching and beautiful, i love it
SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It was really hard writing this one, but I'm glad its done and over with.
Thank you. :D
librian637 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
ur welcome
COLOREDINLOVE Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Usually your first love that ends in a broken heart and totally wipes all the joy and happiness from you,is a tough one to get aren't as angry now..that I can see~~ You are expressing your feelings after the damage has been done...keep on writing day I know it will be better and this will change the way you fall in love again..a little more guarded but don't let this keep you from finding the right one..he is out there...reading this and thinking about you too...lots of love!! Brenda :heart::love:
SurvivingNights Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I've kind of let go of all that recently, and it's just an odd sense of freedom. More freedom that i've felt in all my lifetime. So, with me writing these, it's just like getting it all out of my system. I hope you're right about the future. I don't know.

But again, thank you <3
COLOREDINLOVE Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It will happen..I am still single after my last one..2 years later..not really wanting to go head first into another relationship since I have so much of myself that need to grow and become the person who laughed and found joy in life....It is a slow process but not impossible!
You realize your writing is bring together so many other people who can relate to you and are thankful they aren't alone and can get a new friend too.. I am following you on FB too!! So..Good luck and I am proud of you and your sweet soul! You will be loved....Brenda
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